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This is a tiny bit of dialogue between Buffy and Principal Snyder for The Deathless. This story will be taking place between the third-season episodes "The Zeppo" and "Bad Girls" (which, among other things, means Faith will be in it as a good guy). Ring Day is approaching at Sunnydale High School, and Snyder is having words with Buffy on the subject.

PLEASE NOTE that this is a first-draft and may not represent the final text in the Buffy the Vampire Slayer novel The Deathless, due to be published next spring, and that this is all copyright © 2006, 2007 20th Century Fox Film Corporation.


Reverting to his more typical scowl, Snyder then said, "I can't help but notice, Summers, that you haven't signed up for a ring. No time like the present."

Buffy stared at the floor, hoping the linoleum would provide solace. It didn't. "I can't. I wanted to--really, I did--but we can't afford it."

Snyder shook his head. "Always some excuse. 'I can't afford it, Principal Snyder,' 'Rings make my finger turn green, Principal Snyder,' 'The IRS just did an audit, Principal Snyder.' Kids..." He wagged a finger at Buffy. Buffy somehow resisted the urge to bite it. "Mark my words, Summers, you're walking on thin ice. There are still four months left in the school year, and that's plenty of time for you to revert to form and give me just the excuse I need to expel you a second time." The smile came back, and Snyder straightened up. "I've never expelled anyone twice before. The very thought has me all a-quiver."

"I'm thrilled for you," Buffy deadpanned, trying to hold down her nausea.

"Try to stay out of trouble, Summers. Or better yet, don't."

With that, the principal wandered off to find someone else to annoy.

Willow and Oz appeared at her side, then. Buffy's instinct was to complain that they didn't come to her rescue sooner, but that wasn't fair. Snyder would just trap them in his web of malice like some kind of bald, big-eared spider.

"Everything okay?" Willow sounded concerned.

Buffy tried to shrug it off. "Just Snyder being Snyder. Like he said, there's only four months left, and then we'll never have to deal with him again." She grinned. "The very thought has me all a-quiver."

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trampbear From: trampbear Date: August 8th, 2006 05:05 am (UTC) (Link)
I can picture Armin Shimerman's tight little smile as tells Buffy that he's all a-quiver. Excellent excerpt.
ursulahitler From: ursulahitler Date: August 8th, 2006 05:12 am (UTC) (Link)
Yeah, very Snyder-y.
agilebrit From: agilebrit Date: August 8th, 2006 06:21 am (UTC) (Link)

De-lurks

some kind of bald, big-eared spider

I love that visual...
neadods From: neadods Date: August 8th, 2006 10:50 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: De-lurks

Yes, I think that's my favorite bit of the excerpt.
grimorie From: grimorie Date: August 8th, 2006 06:36 am (UTC) (Link)
He wagged a finger at Buffy. Buffy somehow resisted the urge to bite it.

[laughs] oh this is funny! I can't wait!
meggins From: meggins Date: August 8th, 2006 09:32 am (UTC) (Link)
Jeeps. Now I'm all a-quiver.
zarhooie From: zarhooie Date: August 8th, 2006 12:50 pm (UTC) (Link)
WRITE FASTER.
From: joshtek Date: August 8th, 2006 01:34 pm (UTC) (Link)

Feedback

Nice Snyder dialogue, I can hear Armin as I read it. The a-quiver thing? It feels Buffyeqsue. The IRS reference seems like a good line to help ground the story to Season 3 (even though we don’t hear the whole story until The Prom).

Two things didn't quite fit, but maybe that's just me: Firstly, I'm not keen on the word “then” after “Willow and Oz appeared at her side”. Secondly, I’m not very fond of words being used twice in a row (“finger at Buffy. Buffy somehow resisted”). Neither are incorrect per se, I just don't feel that they flow as well as the rest of the story.

The line "I can't. I wanted to--really, I did--but we can't afford it" sounds Buffyesque but could have a bit more rambling at the end, but I guess that could detract from Snyder’s brush off. Okay, I’ll stop now and leave the prose to the pros. Keep up the good work, and thanks for sharing.
kradical From: kradical Date: August 8th, 2006 04:01 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Feedback

The IRS reference seems like a good line to help ground the story to Season 3 (even though we don’t hear the whole story until The Prom).

Actually, it isn't as such -- Cordelia's getting a ring -- but I can see a student lying about getting one as an excuse not to get a ring. *grin*
From: joshtek Date: August 8th, 2006 09:48 pm (UTC) (Link)

Re: Feedback

Oops. Guess I was looking too much into it.
kradical From: kradical Date: August 9th, 2006 01:01 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Feedback

S'okay -- you only saw a little bit out of context. *grin*
amit From: amit Date: August 8th, 2006 06:07 pm (UTC) (Link)
LOL. That was goood.

Can't wait for more!!!
kradical From: kradical Date: August 9th, 2006 01:02 am (UTC) (Link)
Thanks!
From: joshtek Date: August 8th, 2006 11:47 pm (UTC) (Link)
This entry is now "famous": http://www.whedon.info/article.php3?id_article=17314

The last time they used an entry from this journal was in 2005: http://www.whedon.info/article.php3?id_article=11252
kradical From: kradical Date: August 9th, 2006 01:02 am (UTC) (Link)
Not my first time on WHEDONesque by any means, but it's always good to see me there. *chuckle*
chinae From: chinae Date: August 9th, 2006 02:21 am (UTC) (Link)
You definitely got the voices down.

:)

Thanks for letting us peak.

wesley_1701 From: wesley_1701 Date: August 10th, 2006 05:19 am (UTC) (Link)
I'm not a Buffy fanatic and I've only watched it because my now 21 year old sister loves the guy who plays OZ. It was years ago and I have a few questions:

1.I clearly remember a black man in one of the last episodes of Buffy. I think he played someones principal. Is that Snyder? In the last episode I think. They were on a bus and either the town disappeared or it was eaten by the hellmouth or something.

2.If that is Snyder, isn't he a little tall for a ferengi? Is that Armin Shimmerman?

3.Cordelia. Okay is she the girl thats full of herself? or is she the one demon thing that switches from guy to girl?

4.Who's that girl who is like a demon but she's all "better". Not demonesqe any more? I think she married Oz.

5. Is buffy's "sister" in this novel?

6. Isn't her sister really like a piece of her but created by these monks?

Thanks for humoring my questions. If they don't make sense then my mind is too far gone.
kradical From: kradical Date: August 10th, 2006 05:35 am (UTC) (Link)
1.I clearly remember a black man in one of the last episodes of Buffy. I think he played someones principal. Is that Snyder? In the last episode I think. They were on a bus and either the town disappeared or it was eaten by the hellmouth or something.

The principal in this excerpt is Snyder, who was there for the late first, second, and third seasons. My novel takes place in the third season. Snyder was eaten alive at the end of the third season (around the same time the school was utterly destroyed), making him the second Sunnydale High principal in a row to be eaten alive. (The first was Principal Flutie, who was devoured in the first-season episode "The Pack." He was replaced by Snyder.) Snyder was played by Armin Shimerman, who also played Quark on Deep Space Nine.

The guy you're referring to is Robin Wood, who was the principal of the rebuilt Sunnydale High in the seventh season.


2.If that is Snyder, isn't he a little tall for a ferengi? Is that Armin Shimmerman?

See above. Principal Wood was played by D.B. Woodside (Wayne Palmer on 24).


3.Cordelia. Okay is she the girl thats full of herself? or is she the one demon thing that switches from guy to girl?

The former. She went over to Angel after the third season of Buffy.


4.Who's that girl who is like a demon but she's all "better". Not demonesqe any more? I think she married Oz.

You're thinking of Anya, who first appeared in the third season, and became a regular in the fourth. She almost married Xander, not Oz.


5. Is buffy's "sister" in this novel?

6. Isn't her sister really like a piece of her but created by these monks?


Answering both of these together -- Dawn was created and retroactively inserted into everyone's memories in the beginning of the fifth season. However, this novel takes place in the third season, so Dawn didn't exist yet.

Hope this helps. *grin*
wesley_1701 From: wesley_1701 Date: August 10th, 2006 04:34 pm (UTC) (Link)
Ok thanks. So Oz is Seth Green, and Xander is the dark haired guy. This is a complicated series. The only episode I remember is Hush Hush. Thanks again.

-Wes
kradical From: kradical Date: August 10th, 2006 04:51 pm (UTC) (Link)
Yeah, Oz is Seth Green. *grin*
From: sorek Date: August 11th, 2006 10:09 pm (UTC) (Link)
"Try to stay out of trouble, Summers. Or better yet, don't."

Ooooooooooh. I love it!
From: (Anonymous) Date: August 12th, 2006 01:21 am (UTC) (Link)

Very Funny

That was really good. I can't wait for this book.
JD Brodsky
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